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‘Struck by lightning’ or ‘Struck by thunderbolt’ – I’m not sure which but one of these two phrases was used by Mario Puzo in ‘The Godfather’ to describe what Michael felt when he saw Apollonia for the first time. Although I love the book whole-heartedly, this bit had always stuck to me as if the author on yet another flight of imagination had used up too much booster and had left the real world for a while; until that hot summer evening.

Walking home, I saw her waiting on the sidewalk and completely lost my train of thoughts. Her petite frame, the curly locks framing her face, and the twinkle in her eyes knowing she had my undivided attention had me captive. Involuntarily a smile escaped my lips, and I think I saw her lips curve before they shouted, “Watch out” and I blacked out.

Wow it’s raining in summer”, I thought enjoying the trickle of cool water on my face, before I realized the water was being splashed on me. My second realization was of a splitting headache. Squinting through it I saw a crowd surrounding me and I spotted her worried face. I uttered, “You look better smiling” – thankfully I was not in my complete senses, else these words would have never come out of my mouth unless there was a gun pointed to my head and even than I would have had second thoughts. I sat up groggily and asked, “Was I hit by a car?” and I knew Mario Puzo had it absolutely right when she smiled, “I think you got hit by the thunderbolt.


P.S: Not my best effort, but at least I wrote something after a long time 🙂


18 Responses to “Thunderbolts”

  1. 1 shrikant April 20, 2010 at 1:34 pm

    hey this is good, especially how u connected the last and first bit

  2. 3 mythalez April 20, 2010 at 2:50 pm

    u mean ‘struck’ 😛

    and here: “else these words would have come out of my mouth”, u mean wouldn’t 😛

    now that i am done with the editor-itch .. I liked the description of the girl very much 😀

    • 4 Kunal April 20, 2010 at 3:01 pm

      Editor Sahab, took care of my mistakes.. 🙂

      And to find such a girl, venture out in a stormy weather.. Maybe you too would be “Struck by a thunderbolt” 😛

  3. 5 mythalez April 20, 2010 at 4:07 pm

    i hadnt bothered to list one more .. thought u will notice it anyway .. here it is: lightning 😉

  4. 7 Rakesh April 20, 2010 at 4:46 pm

    Good story. Keep writing and keep inspiring others 🙂

  5. 9 Ankit April 20, 2010 at 7:28 pm

    Sth similar was there in GodFather as well…

    • 10 Kunal April 22, 2010 at 5:58 pm

      Dude I took the dialog from Godfather and weaved the story around that 🙂 Check the link on the last line of the story 😀

  6. 11 Phatichar April 21, 2010 at 12:05 pm

    Nice. Very nice. 🙂

  7. 13 Aniket April 23, 2010 at 3:40 am

    Another of those girl-boy romances. Not very diff to write, not diff at all to like. Good one 🙂

  8. 15 Winnie the Poohi April 29, 2010 at 1:13 am

    Awwww mush! perfect reading for rainy rainy weather 😀 😀

  9. 17 Himank April 29, 2010 at 3:36 pm

    Nice read from you after a long time… That connection is the life of the story 🙂

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