Crossroads

Ingredients: Insomnia, half-cooked idea.
Result: Yet another 55, although had to struggle a lot to get this down to 55. Maybe it would have been better off as a Short Story πŸ™‚

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She was riding pillion with her boyfriend, it didn’t matter. Her beautiful face, and the simple act of brushing hair off her face – I was captivated, and went miles out of way trying to inhale her beauty.

I started believing – in love at first sight!

Turning, I resumed my original drive to meet my girlfriend.

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17 Responses to “Crossroads”


  1. 1 Pallav May 5, 2009 at 1:47 am

    Great idea. I think it works better as a ’55’. I kind of had a feeling that that was the direction you were going in. On a side note, I think I like sentences that have two thats or hads one after the other.

  2. 2 mythalez May 5, 2009 at 3:42 am

    i would have preferred it as a short story … πŸ˜‰

  3. 3 Rakesh May 5, 2009 at 7:35 am

    Has Sumati read this πŸ˜‰

  4. 5 Alosh May 5, 2009 at 12:57 pm

    ahem ahem πŸ˜€

  5. 6 Sangfroid May 5, 2009 at 4:56 pm

    hehehe … turned just in time or coz of a stare from the boyfriend πŸ˜‰

  6. 8 Aniket May 5, 2009 at 6:39 pm

    Nice. Should try this some time.
    And I disagree with Karan and Rama when they say that it would work better as a short story. I don’t think the plot has that much content. It was perfect as a 55 πŸ™‚

  7. 9 @nks May 6, 2009 at 12:40 pm

    another proof for “ghar ku murgi daal barabar” saying … πŸ˜€

  8. 10 Chittaranjan May 7, 2009 at 3:55 am

    I was half-thinking you’d ‘cozy-up’ towards the ‘boyfriend’ πŸ˜›

    Good one, nevertheless.

  9. 11 arunima May 8, 2009 at 10:03 am

    It is ok to be attarcted to someone while in a relationship but oh boy, how could he see another girl on his way to a date? πŸ™‚

  10. 12 arunima May 8, 2009 at 10:05 am

    It is ok to be attracted to someone while in a relationship but oh boy, how could he see another girl on his way to a date? πŸ™‚

  11. 13 Kunal May 15, 2009 at 3:50 pm

    Bhai, even I like such sentences. At least it assures me that the writer knows English well πŸ™‚

    Rama, it started as one πŸ™‚

    Rakesh, she read it πŸ˜‰ and I was interrogated too πŸ˜›

    Karan, πŸ™‚

  12. 14 Kunal May 15, 2009 at 3:50 pm

    Alosh, did you notice the tag “Fiction”? πŸ™‚

    Sangfroid, luckily, as the boyfriend was well built πŸ˜›

    obelix, thanks!

  13. 15 Kunal May 15, 2009 at 3:51 pm

    Aniket, even I have to agree, I could have easily stretched the 120-130 word content to 300-400, but then would have made it boring. Instead shortened it to 55 πŸ™‚

    @nks, πŸ˜›

    Chittaranjan, rofl… seems you are still reeling under the shock of the gay-55 πŸ˜›

    Arunima, beats me. I am just the writer, will have to ask the actor πŸ™‚

  14. 16 makrand13 July 17, 2009 at 12:44 pm

    works well as 55

  15. 17 Kunal July 20, 2009 at 4:32 pm

    Makrand, now even I feel that..


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