First Love?

Maybe this is the best 55 I’ve written, maybe it is the most pathetic. What it is, I’ve no clue.
Disclaimer: Rahul is a purely fictitious character with no resemblance to any person I know.

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Rahul could think of nothing, but those eyes.

He didn’t know what love was, but felt maybe this is it. But how could those eyes have this effect? Neither beautiful actresses, nor shapely models had moved him; how could those eyes make him swoon?

Try as he might, he couldn’t forget his face, his eyes.

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16 Responses to “First Love?”


  1. 1 Rakesh March 19, 2009 at 12:15 pm

    KJo has corrupted a lot of Indians I see.

  2. 2 Sangfroid March 19, 2009 at 12:45 pm

    ‘HIS face’, ‘HIS eyes’ … Nice twist 🙂

  3. 3 mythalez March 19, 2009 at 2:01 pm

    the surprise element was spoiled for me by the tweets !!

  4. 4 Badrinath March 19, 2009 at 2:38 pm

    After the first two paragraphs, I was expecting either a total klpd ending – his dog for eg, or a total senti ending – death of a GF or his wife. this was certainly unexpected 😉

  5. 5 Kulbir Saini March 19, 2009 at 2:42 pm

    brilliant ending 😀 btw who is Rahul 😉

  6. 8 Arun March 19, 2009 at 7:04 pm

    nice twist! to the tale

  7. 9 Chittaranjan March 20, 2009 at 12:58 am

    hmm…Is it just me or is the klpd ending has become mundane by now?

    P.S: I was half-expecting dog’s eyes or a baby’s eyes

  8. 10 Kunal March 20, 2009 at 1:17 pm

    Rakesh, it seems so 😛

    Sangfroid, thanks dude 🙂

    Rama, damn you Rakesh 😡

  9. 11 Kunal March 20, 2009 at 1:18 pm

    Badrinath, glad I was able to surprise 🙂

    Kulbir, hard to imagine with such a common name, but I do not know any Rahul 🙂 just picked the first common name that came to mind…

    obelix, any specific reason? 😦

  10. 12 Kunal March 20, 2009 at 1:18 pm

    Gopal, 🙂

    Arun, thanks!

    Chittaranjan, yeah I think those endings have become mundane now.. but a twist seems to me, as of now, the only way to end a 55. will get around to proper endings maybe later on… anyway at least with this story I was able to surprise many, for most the expectations of the end were very different 🙂

  11. 13 @nks March 20, 2009 at 5:38 pm

    thrs a possibility of him looking into a mirror … 😀

  12. 14 Kunal March 21, 2009 at 4:57 pm

    @nks, never thought of that!! Now that would have been an extreme definition of a narcissist 🙂 .. and would have made for an extraordinarily different ending 😛

  13. 15 manuscrypts March 23, 2009 at 3:12 pm

    hmmmm, is it another guy or a mirror? *the first thing that he saw after his “aankhon ka oprashun” kind? to explain the love* 🙂

  14. 16 Kunal March 30, 2009 at 1:32 pm

    @manu, it is another guy 🙂 and the “aankhon ka oprasun” kind of story could have added credence to the narcissist story 😛


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